On May 22, 2020
In dVerse Challenge, Poetry
The howling winds had
driven away his sleep and
the rain played spoilsport
on the plan for the weekend
to go out for a picnic
Linking to dVerse Challenge: 5-Line Japanese Poetic Forms
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I like how each line slowly advances the “story,” gradually giving a more complete picture.
I like the description of the rain as a “spoilsport”.
Thanks Frank :).
Terse images, each building layer upon layer, until the final disappointment is unveiled. Well done!
Yep. It certainly rained on his parade!
Yeah it surely did.
Hope your poem isn’t a forecast for weather in Bend Oregon … need to breathe fresh air and feel the sun on my face. Well done.
Ahh! Hope there’s some sun coming your way soon enough :).
Disappointment…well expressed. The weather can spoil the best of plans. (K)
Thanks. Yes it surely can.
Weather’s one of those things impossible to ignore when it throws a tantrum.
True that. I also think that weather plays an important role to manage our moods as well.
Yes, for sure. Sun is happy. Grey is sad.
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